Friday, May 22, 2009

Telling It Like It Is....

...Instead of showing. I'll have to fix that.

First draft:

He leaned forward and laid a soft kiss on her forehead. "I'll be fine. Goodnight."

Umm, let's try that again.

He leaned closer. His dry lips brushed the skin above her brow. "I'm fine. Goodnight."

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